Worked example · IT · Year 7
LNF: Literacy → Writing → Punctuation
A secure Year 7 response, annotated so you can see which success criterion each part meets. It is also the answer key. Small differences are fine where both versions are correct (for example, a comma after “Before you start” is good practice but some pupils leave it out). Apostrophes: you’ll, don’t, pet’s, it’s, you’ve, he’s, school’s.
(a) 3 sentences.
(b) Welcome, Your and Before start sentences. Ysgol Cwm Arian is the name of a place (a school), so all three words need capitals.
(c) List 1: email, the learning platform, the printers. List 2: your username, your temporary password, a quiet place to concentrate.
Spotting sentence boundaries and lists first makes the rewriting much easier. Evidences criteria 1 and 2.
Welcome to Ysgol Cwm Arian. Your school account lets you use email, the learning platform and the printers. Before you start, you will need three things: your username, your temporary password and a quiet place to concentrate.
The colon comes after a complete sentence (“you will need three things”) and introduces the list. No comma is needed before “and” in a short list. Evidences criteria 1 and 2.
1. Go to the school login page and type your username. It looks like this: 25jonesm.
2. Type your temporary password. You’ll be asked to change it straight away.
3. Choose a new password. The National Cyber Security Centre advises using three random words, for example: teapotlighthousecarrot. Don’t use your name, your pet’s name or your birthday.
4. Set up two-step verification. It’s an extra check that keeps your account safe, even if someone learns your password.
5. Log out when you’ve finished, especially on a shared computer.
Are you stuck? Ask Mr Roberts in the IT office (room 14). He’s there every day except Friday. The school’s email address for help is on the back of your planner.
you’ll M · don’t M · pet’s B · it’s M · you’ve M · he’s M · school’s B
Every step is split into short sentences, which suits instructions. Capitals for the organisation (National Cyber Security Centre), the person and the day. Apostrophes are sorted correctly into missing letters and belonging. The question is marked with a question mark, and brackets hold the room number. Evidences criteria 1, 2 and 3.
1. its · 2. It’s · 3. your · 4. you’re
Rule: if you can say “it is” or “it has” instead, write it’s. If not, it means “belonging to it”, so write its with no apostrophe.
Evidences criterion 4.
How to keep your school account safe
Your account holds a lot of your work, so you need to protect three things: your password, your screen and your files.
1. Never share your password, even with your best friend, and never log in to a friend’s account.
2. Lock your screen whenever you walk away from a computer.
3. Don’t click links in emails you weren’t expecting.
4. Use different passwords for school, games and social media, so one leak can’t open everything.
What should you do if you think someone has used your account? Tell your form tutor or the IT office straight away, and change your password.
Colon after a complete sentence introducing a list; four numbered steps each ending with a full stop; commas in two lists; four apostrophes, three for missing letters (don’t, weren’t, can’t) and one for belonging (friend’s); and a question with a question mark, followed by its answer. Evidences criteria 2, 3 and 5.
Did you know? Three random words (such as teapot, lighthouse and carrot) are easier to remember than a short password full of symbols.
“... three random words, for example: teapotlighthousecarrot.” The comma separates the extra part (“for example”) from the main sentence, and the colon introduces the example.